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Butterflies by mexicanpedo

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Hi, my name is Aura Dawn. Am a 3D artist and Animator. Also am qualified in glamor, fashion and illustrative photography. My critiques is not to praise the artist but to show where strong points and weak points are in their art. You do not have to accept this critique but can choose not to

First of all must say you let a good opportunity slip by. As in so many animations by amateurs it seems the main goal is to quickly be done with your work instead of producing a good animation. You have a good subject and a good video, so why rush it, why cut the frames out. Your camera takes approximately 24 frames per second, You can tell you dropped frames by the speed the ducks swim. All of this speed, including the ripping of her stomach and releasing a horde of bats is all done to swiftly. It looks like from what can see, quality work in the graphics of the stomach opening, though a little blood from the tear would be nice, but putting that aside, the material in the animation has the potential to make a decent animation, just add a whole lot more frames and make it at least a half minute animation, but preferably a minute.

Also reflect some light onto the front of the subject as she is in shadows which again takes away from the quality of the work.

Am sorry cannot give a more positive critique but at least have given one.
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:iconmexicanpedo:
First of all: THANK YOU!
I am genuinely glad to get constructive critique and yours made me very happy.
And yes, you are right, my goal was to be quickly done with this indeed, because I've been very lazy.
About the frames, it wasn't a video. There really were only a few frames because we took photos since my camera cannot record, and it was more of a "out of nowhere idea" to make a gif at all.
I'm going to stop here because it sounds like I'm making excuses.
I know I could've done better and THANK YOU for pointing it out!
Really motivates me to do more.
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Aura-Dawn Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
the camera that use now cannot also take video so have to take them frame by frame. a hint. Set camera on tripod so it does not move and then have your model move extremely slow, snapping the pictures. Not much practice will be needed as long as the camera is stationary. My camera will take eight pictures a second. I do this needing to have a video of the movement of clouds.
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:iconmexicanpedo:
I know all of that, but as I said, the whole gif thing wasn't planned at all so we didn't pay much attention to details..
but thank you anyway!
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Aura-Dawn Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
welcome
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