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Hi My name is Aura-Dawn I was once a fashion and glamor photographer. Am now a 3D artist, so I will try to give you a fair Critique. I saw two of your pieces of similar scenes. I chose this one as the other one had a horrible contrast problem. So with that out of the way I will bet started.

It must be said that this is a unique way of being introduced to the photo as well as a unique way to get her hot.
The lighting of the scene appears to be either a bounced flood, or flash along with a ceiling light. You did well in lighting this picture though no light seems to paint her, but again that may not be what you were after.

Even though looking at ones spread butt cheeks is quite a site, the picture is over all very pleasing though somewhat cluttered. There are two main items that should have been taken out of the scene before shooting it or cropped out. One being this blurred object in the lower left hand corner of the picture, the other the item and shadow at the far right of the picture.

A critique in my opinion is not to flatter the artist as you have done well in certain areas but one can't learn if one is not presented with alternatives that might make a bigger impact. I believe that fireplace flames are not real. If you would have set up a reflector to light that beautiful section that rest in darkness it would have been more pleasing to the eye. Soft shadows would have been nice. But you didn't so what could be done with the picture you took. It would be hard to explain so what I did was copy your picture, spent five minutes cropping and resizing. I uploaded the picture to [link] where it is hidden from the public and only you and I can view it. In my opinion this would have made your picture very desirable with very little extra time.

I will leave the picture up for a an hour after you either accept or reject this critique. The picture uploaded is yours. Download it, post it, what ever you want as I said it is yours not mine. If you want to give me credit as an assist, that is up to you. I only did this to show you what a little editing can do to impact a picture with potential which yours does. As I said before, you and I are the only ones that have access to the link. and it is my way of showing you something that would be too hard to put into words.
The Artist thought this was FAIR
2 out of 2 deviants thought this was fair.


LeeHarwell Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
Thank you for a most erudite and thorough examination of my photo. Your edit was most instructive as it removes material extraneous to the composition. The fire, of course was real, but poorly composed. As a result the close cropping you demonstrated was a much better approach. "Less is better", is the lesson you gave me. Thank you so much for the critique!
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
your welcome. The photograph that I edited has now been deleted
BadKittyGoHome Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes, we agree it was cluttered and needed editing. No, the fire is real and was the only thing keeping me warm at the time. Wish I could have see the edited photograph.
I had done an erotica photo shoot with this pose before, but it wasn't artistically done like I would have preferred. Lee wasn't interested in erotica shots which made this pose all the more important to do again the right way.
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Though you did see the edited version did to show you what it would look like. Well luckily had not emptied the desktop trash yet, so was able to recover it and upload it again. Here is [link] let me know when you download it so can delete it again.
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