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© For the past few weeks while in and out of the hospital, this story has captivated my waking and sleeping moments.  What brought it about really do not know.  Maybe it is many of tales that listen to, maybe it is because of something saw on television a while ago about same sex marriages.    But I do know what the gist of the story is about, is real, it happens, and my heart goes out to those who suffer as the girl in story.  Hope you enjoy, and please comment if you like it.

-You use my work and I will find out, all characters, stories, and other elements are copyrighted.©-
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:iconyuukon:
Yuukon Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2016   Photographer
Hey, I saw your story at SharpenedEdge, and I love how much emotion you put into this! I am a slow reader, but your style of writing made it easy for me to read! Well done! :clap:
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
very nice comment, many thanks
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:iconvanndra:
vanndra Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a very powerful piece of literature. It describes very well the heartache, confusion and longing to be accepted, of someone who finds them selves in this situation. If only the world was less judgmental and people could accept others as they are. If only parents could be happy for their children and not want them to be clones of themselves. If only ..........

Brilliant work!!! Thanks for sharing with :iconsharpenededge: and stimulating thoughts about this subject.
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
Again, a very beautiful comment, thank you very much it is most appreciated.
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:iconvanndra:
vanndra Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome :)
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:iconxwykydwytchx:
XWykydWytchX Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2016  Professional General Artist
Oh wow. This is really powerful. The ending got me teary eyed. The parents should have put away their disdain and anger and helped their daughter. I am a mom of 3 and could never let my child slip away. You wrote this so well. Your descriptions painted a vivid picture in my mind as I read this. A very powerful peice. 
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
Am very happy to read such a nice comment, and glad the story had an impact on you.  While many love their children, there are some that slip through the cracks, or get tossed away like unwanted garbage, or sold to the highest bidder, or even bred to be used, and discarded when that use runs out.

Am glad you love your children for they are precious things.
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:iconjules-101:
jules-101 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
I saw your comment for me, and I should be able to open the link, but my laptop is currently under stress :D It's held together with duct tape. I would love to read your story, so I will try to read it again a bit later. Your comment struck a nerve with me. I am thinking I will be able to relate to whatever you wrote, if only I could read it :( :hug: 
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
sent you another link. 
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:iconjules-101:
jules-101 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh, thank you! Let me go find it :D
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jules-101 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
I loved it! An incredible story :heart:  It truly captured so much feeling :hug: Awesome writing!
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:iconczmartin:
czmartin Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2015
i finally read this your short story,although my english isn't perfect. I liked the theme,i was trying to embody with the main story hero/heroine and  it was surely an interesting and unusual experience. Sorry for the late response!
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:iconwolfy-pony:
Wolfy-Pony Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is a really great story, I'm so glad I took the time to read it, loved it 
I really didn't expect that twist there, made me go back and read some parts again with new context, adding more to the experience 
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, really did enjoy your comment.  Also am honored that you chose it as a favorite.  Many thanks for that, perhaps it will give more exposure to the story.  My English is not that good, so it took longer then normally would in a short story, but meaning behind to story said that it had to be the best that could do.  So like said, your comment is greatly appreciated.  Again many thanks.
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:iconsimbalonso:
Simbalonso Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! This is written very well. I like the twists and turns in the plot, they really left me thinking. There was actually a lot of suspense from beginning to end and it made me want to read on. You described the characters in a lot of depth, which allowed me to envisage them.
There is a very deep message behind it. I like how it focuses on acceptance and individuality. 

Great work :clap: Thank you for sharing :hug:
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Many thanks for reading it, and even more for the in-depth comment, it is much appreciated.  Am glad that you were able to understand it.   It is always a pleasure to share and have people comment on your work, even when there is fault in that work, it helps us grow.  Again thank you
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:iconsimbalonso:
Simbalonso Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. I don't usually read short stories on dA, but it was written very well and I wanted to know what happened in the end :D
It's a great piece of work :clap:
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
When write a short story have found that having an ending that is unpredictable is always the best.  To where you leave subtle clues, but the plot twist and turns and people say, didn't see that coming.  Wrote a thousand page novel about fifteen years ago, It is in chinese and to much to translate.  Besides my English vocabulary is not that good.  Anyways was told to get an agent to help sell it.  Well agents aren't cheap, but did save enough money to hire one, give him the manuscript.  Then later when he critiqued it, he asked me a question.  What was the purpose of the cat that was in the story.  I canceled the check, and told him to sue me for it.  He didn't read the story or else he would have learned the cat was one of the main characters.  That is was a being who's task was to watch out and protect the main character until he could return to his rightful heratage.  Anyways the reason told you this was to say that in my stories the twist and turns are so that it is really difficult to predict the end.  Hate when pick up a book and you know the ending within the first chapter.

Thank you from breaking from your norm and reading the story.
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:iconsimbalonso:
Simbalonso Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:nod: It was written very well, you are good at building suspense. To say you think your English vocabulary is not very good, you did a great job at describing and making the story flow well.
It's a shame about the agent, he clearly didn't understand the concept :(
Yes I know what you mean, twists and turns are what make it interesting.

You are very welcome. You always read and comment on my work, so it's only fair that I return the favour.
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:iconclara-01:
clara-01 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Oh.... I was very confused at first (sorry), but I think I've got it (and probably should hide this comment as to not give a spoiler). Charly and Charlie are the same person, right? 

I admit this one got me confused. In a good way. :)

I admit erotic literature is not a genre I am comfortable with (nothing personal by it, I just... well I'm still a bit too uptight for that yet :( ), but you got me interested by wanting to know what was going on. :thumbsup:  
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Usually erotic literature is personal only and enjoyable to write, but normally wouldn't think of sharing it.   Usually it gets tossed at the end of writing it.   Fantasy, and perhaps a love story.  This story was originally a lot stronger and more explicit, but because felt it needed shared, went back and lightened it up removing the downright blunt detail because it was the intent behind the story and not meant to be erotic, though it did have to contain some.

Yes Charlie and Charly are the same.  If you didn't fit the parent's mold you were disowned.  Charlie loved his parents so wouldn't do anything to hurt them but in the end took the only road that they left open to him.  Parents sometimes don't understand the hold they have over their child.  Sometimes the answer is simple but is overlooked.    It is a shame Charlie felt he had to take his life, there were other solutions, perhaps but he couldn't confide in anyone.  His father and mother were controllers.  They felt their son had to fit the mold they set forth.   Even though this story is about a transgender it could be about any child who does not live up to their parents expectations.  Sometimes parents only look at their side of the coin and that their child's.  This story could have been about anyone, not just a transgender, or homosexual.  Well actually Charlie was straight, he only like women.  If he went through the surgery to become a full woman, then she would have been a homosexual for she would not have wanted to sleep with a man, would have reminded her to much of what she had hated of herself.  Take me for example.  I have such a distaste of the thought of sleeping with a man, that I refuse to wear anything that could be mistaken for men's clothing.   No pants, no shorts, no t shirts or sweats.  Could go on but you get the gist.

Many times people talk to me and whether or not they believe it, am a good listener.   There were a few people who caused me to write this and it is because of them that uploaded it to DA.  None of these people were like Charlie, but still their situation as they explained left a bad taste in mouth that felt like Charlie.

It was the intent of the author to mislead the reader into thinking they were two different people.   Charlie was most happy when she was Charly.  So people are born beautiful so do say, others have to put on a face and makeup, others, even females have to pad their bras to give them lift to help shape them, or wear a body shaper to give that curve they think they need.  It is easy for me to say that a person should be satisfied with what they were born with, but I do realize there are people born in the wrong skin.  Each of us have a right to be happy.  We own our own lives and should have the right to appear as what ever we desire, as long as it is possible., or as close to that image as humanly possible.  No one but us, should have the right to say what we should or should not be.

If possible could you explain what confused you.  In  a note if it makes you more comfortable.
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clara-01 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I see indeed why you wrote this story, it is a very important message for everyone to see, understand, and change the outcome... 

Ah, no problem by saying it here. At first, before I re-read it with the thought that they might be one person, I was confused why Charlie loved Charly, and at the same time Jessica. I let it pass, thinking that it was only a double-love, that happens everytime to love two persons. But what started to confuse me even more, is when Jessica say that Charly and Charlie are twins. As I was sure you wouldn't have wrote about incest, I started wondering if you mixed up the names. But as I started getting clues, I realized that the twins must have been in fact the same person, with two persona: the female side hates the male side, and love Jessica, while the male side love his female persona, and by extent, love Jessica. So now everything made sense.

Finally, the only slight confusion I had was what happened at the end, who was the dead boy, and who was the free boy... until I realized that free doesn't necessarily mean being alive.

So at the end, nothing was confusing now. I was just slow at getting the clues. :lol:
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2015
I love it!!!! So very well done, love all the details within the two characters and she is damn sexy!!
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:iconaura-dawn:
Aura-Dawn Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you my friend, this is one of the rare pieces that feel is worthy of a favor.  Thanks for all that you have done to help me edit it.
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